an old wheezing bull,
cold rain water dribbling
down his black side
~
burrows walk around naked,
dark in the troubled night
they dream clothes
~
a cold note
in the kitchen,
‘I bought walking shoes
for you’
~
lemming doesn’t see hawk
fly in from behind
as I don’t you
~
I stir the broom
so I don’t drift
away like a boat
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5 comments:
Very focused and controlled. Each piece a separate distinct entity, yet each a different view, perspective, of central object. Together, an incredible panoramic. Hauntinly evocative.
Elizabeth
"Hauntingly"
What an amazing collection. Enjoyed those a lot, particularly the bull Hadron.
You were able to pack a lot into your twelve words. The picture of the bull, the "cold" note and walking shoes, the lemming flying -- very vivid and often including a twist. Impressive. Annette at http://hoofprintsinmygarden.wordpress.com/2012/07/21/tractor/
Great writing!! Nice how you collected some. :)
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